The Top 5 Query Letter Mistakes Writers Make

As a literary agent, I read hundreds of query letters. Some shine. Many don’t. The difference often comes down to avoidable mistakes.

Here are the top five query letter pitfalls I see most often—and how to fix them.

1. Starting with Backstory Instead of Hook

Agents want to know what your book is about. Start with your protagonist, their conflict, and what’s at stake. Save your personal writing journey for later.

2. Being Vague

“Things change when she discovers a dark secret” doesn’t tell me anything. What secret? Why does it matter? Be specific.

3. Overloading with Details

Queries aren’t synopses. Stick to the main character, conflict, and stakes. Leave subplots for the book.

4. Ignoring Genre or Word Count

Agents need to know where your book fits in the market. Include your genre and approximate word count up front.

5. Forgetting the Personal Touch

A generic “Dear Agent” letter doesn’t connect. Personalize when possible by showing why you chose to query that agent.

How an Editor Can Help

With my background in both editing and agenting, I help writers craft query letters that are clear, professional, and market-ready. I also offer a Query Package service (query, synopsis, and first 10 pages review) to help writers put their best foot forward.

📌 Need a second set of eyes on your query? Contact me—I’d love to help you strengthen your pitch.